I am a year 6 learner at St. Pius X Catholic School in Auckland, New Zealand. I am in the Te Wairua Pakiki 4 Learning Space and my teachers are Ms Nees-Kairua and Mrs Tui.
Thanks for sharing your writing! I really liked some of the words you've used: TERRIFIED, MANSION, DARK & DIRTY, SLAMMED.
Writer's Tip - Check that your writing makes sense by using your full stops in the right places. You can even add in commas when you are listing things.
Hi Sione. I really enjoyed your story. You used some great descriptive words. You had me guessing right till the end. I agree some full stops and commas would have helped in the story. But great writing.
Thanks for sharing your writing! I really liked some of the words you've used: TERRIFIED, MANSION, DARK & DIRTY, SLAMMED.
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Hi Sione. I really enjoyed your story. You used some great descriptive words. You had me guessing right till the end. I agree some full stops and commas would have helped in the story. But great writing.
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